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Hey everyone, Im off to vancouver in november on a reccie and was hoping to arrange to meet up with a few employers, just wondering if this letter would be ok to send off, any suggestions/constructive criticism welcome.:)

Dear Sir


I am currently employed in the Isle of Man as an industrial electrician and enclose my resume for your information.

I have been granted a permanent residence visa and I will be travelling to Vancouver on the 24th November to activate it, returning to the Island on the 6th December.

I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to meet with you to discuss any opportunities that may arise within your company.

I am aware that new immigrants have six months to challenge for Red Seal certification and I intend to apply for the examination as soon as I arrive.

Thank you for taking the time to read this letter, any information about the industry in Vancouver/British Columbia would be greatly appreciated.

Yours faithfully

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Sir / Madam


UK or Great Britain, not Isle of Man (not brits likely wont have a clue)

Good Luck!

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Futher to Iains point

"Vancouver on the 24th November to activate it, returning to the Island on the 6th December"

I believe many would just assume you would be returning to Vancouver island from the mainland

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Yep good points, will edit

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Dear Sir or Madam


Presently, I am employed in the UK as an industrial electrician, but I am looking to move to the Vancouver area as soon as I can.

As a permanent resident I can accept any offer of employment in Canada. I will be visiting Vancouver between November 24th and December 6th this year. During this visit I hope to find a place to live and to learn about employment opportunities for industrial electricians in The Lower Mainland.

I will greatly appreciate the opportunity to meet with you briefly on an informal basis to learn about your company and ask your advice on how I should go about finding employment opportunities.

I am aware that new residents have six months to challenge for Red Seal certification and I intend to apply for the examination as soon as possible.

My resume is enclosed for your information.

Yours truly

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^ This I like:thumbup:

although I wouldnt have capitalised "the lower mainland", but then Im the last one here who should comment on such subtleties I suspect

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Thats alot better than mine I have to say!
Thanks alot for the help guys, its much appreciated:thumbup:

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It is a proper noun.

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I take it thats OK then...:unsure: I should know to keep quiet by now!

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Go sit in the corner. :p

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Actually, you may have a point. I'm not sure the The should be capitalized, but the L and M definitely should. It depends on whether or or not the area really called The Lower Mainland or just Lower Mainland.

Edit: on further research it should be the (small t) Lower Mainland.

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I always figured it was more a colloquial geographical description rather than an actual proper name, but then I live 3000km away...

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