Elvira

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Nick01

Hi everyone,

Until now the recruiter did not contact me. So I decided to write him another e-mail to let him know that I am still interested in the position and that I found another job offer at the same company I am interested in. What do you think?

Could you check the e-mail I prepared? I know I am asking quite a bit, but would be extremly grateful. I appreciate any comment and correction. Thanks!

Dear xxxx,

I am still veryinterested in the Training Program at xxxx. Though I am aware of another announcement from xxxx on careerbuilder.com offering a position as a bi-lingual technical support representative I am very interested in as well.

I have attached my resume and you'll see that I am a candidate with fluency in French and German and that I have been involved in customer service positions the past four years. So I have experience of working in a help-desk environment in the financial industrie and have a general knowledge of IT.

I am eligible to work in the USA and would be available as from first of August.

I appreciate your reading my e-mail and considering me for one of these positions.

Sincerely,

Nick

Bob

typo and grammar are a big no-no....and state your work authorised at the start, it's what they are most interested in.

Nick01

Hey Bob, thanks for your answer. I'll change the letter:


Dear xxxx,

I am still very interested in the Training Program at xxxx. Though I am aware of another announcement from xxxx on careerbuilder.com offering a position as a bi-lingual technical support representative. I am very interested in this position as well, because the requirements aligne very well with my experience and skills.

I have attached my resume and you'll see that I am fluent in French and German and that I have been involved in customer service positions the past four years. So I have experience of working in a help-desk environment in the financial sector and a general knowledge of IT.

I am eligible to work in the USA and would be available as from first of August.

I appreciate your reading my e-mail and considering me for one of these positions.

Sincerely,

Nick

The recruiter I am sending the mail should already know that I am eligible to work in the USA an d I will write it on my resume as well.

TouristTrap

align.

Nick01

thank you !

Jerseygirl

I think Bob was trying to tell you to put the bit about being authorised to work in the US at the very beginning of the letter. Just tell them you are a USC.

Bob

yup, because if they skim through and see that your a foreigner, they might just bin it straight off rather than bother read through to see the details, if on the other hand you start your cover letter/resume with saying your work authorised, they'll more likely look through it as you've got to be expecting these people to be getting stacks of emails a day.

Nick01

Thanks again for your input. I mention know the work authorization at the beginning.

what about the typos and grammar? still a big no-no ?

Dear xxxx,

I am still very interested in the Training Program at xxxx. I am eligible to work in the USA and would be available as from first of August.

Though I am aware of another announcement from xxxx on careerbuilder.com offering a position as a bi-lingual technical support representative. I am very interested in this position as well, because the requirements align very well with my experience and skills.

I have attached my resume and you'll see that I am fluent in French and German and that I have been involved in customer service positions the past four years. So I have experience of working in a help-desk environment in the financial sector and a general knowledge of IT.

I appreciate your reading my e-mail and considering me for one of these positions.

Sincerely,

Nick

Bob

that's all I'd change

Jerseygirl

I would defo say I was a USC...not just Johnny on a visa.

Nick01

Okay, thank you very much !

Bob

if you aren't though, that's asking for more trouble than it is worth.

Jerseygirl

He is...he was born in the US.