mikewot

I was talking about writing one, not responding to one.

The_Citizen

Will buy it on Amazon today and start reading tonight

Congratulations by the way!

weasel decentral

Must be hard to type one handed?

Thank you

Theseus

I usually only skim read the sex scenes in most books anyway as i don't know many authors that can write a sex scene without making it a bit cringy and uncomfortable reading, so unless there's anything plot specific, i.e. Patrick Bateman style scene, I don't read them, you might as just write "we had amazing filthy sex". One line done!

I've not finished it yet, but i'm reading other things as well, as documented in the What Are You Reading thread. So far really enjoying it though.

One comment i have is that it is pretty fast paced particularly in the fo9rst few chapters, which is a good thing. and Although i'm not reading it with a critical eye, I have realised that i'm not sure what anyone looks like. I don't have an image in my head and i'm wondering if you have been a little bit too lean on the descriptive? I'm happy with less description but on the other hand it reads, in my head like its almost too fast paced, maybe a bit manic. But, i'm not that far into it yet and that might be a deliberate ploy on your part to convey the protagonist's self centered and slightly unsettled personality.

Sorry not very articulate rambling there from me with too many commas. Anyway I will give you a proper verdict and review on amazon once i'm finished.

All in all so far.

NorthernLad

Just bought it, will start reading tonight...I considering asking for the freebie, but for putting in the time and effort have a pint on me.

mikewot

Interesting! My mother and I read really quickly, almost absorbing the words as opposed to 'reading'. We hate descriptive stuff "he was wearing brown brogue shoes, the lace up type. There was a patch of dust on the upper part of the toecap, filling some of the holes" FFS!! Who cares, he was wearing shoes, full stop! The only description we want is if there's some action, sort of putting yourself into the scene, like sailing a boat in a storm. I want to know about the wind and waves, getting splashed, rope burn on my hands etc. I want the author to make me feel like I'm actually part of it.
Whereas my father and wife love descriptions, being told the colour of clothes etc. They'll also reread sentences they particularly enjoyed. I never do that.

weasel decentral

Interesting points

In my mind I wanted the characters to be defined by actions or personality totally. To be people who you could relate to, and almost put the face of someone you know on them mentally.
The first few chapters are intended to be rapid fire; the reasoning was to create a feeling of dropping into the middle of a hectic lifestyle and also due to the editor's feeling that kindle previewed books are creating this first few pages attention grab culture so it's important to try follow that.

Going through the whole process sort of opened my eyes to a lot of things I had never considered before actually.

Kix

Hope you're not going to put any spoilers up - I can only manage a book at a time.

weasel decentral

No I won't ruin any details, everything mentioned so far doesn't really reveal anything. All general stuff.

Millhouse

Weasel - for some reason I can't download it. Is it restricted to a UK kindle or something?

I think my account is US.


<ignore, it now works - three quid though that's taking the piss>

weasel decentral

I will send it for free to you esteemed fellow poster, and there is no drm on the file.

Millhouse

oddly, when I click your link there is no option to buy. If I search for it, I can buy it...

weasel decentral

I will update the link, it seems Amazon randomly move shit about from the first link they gave me.

weasel decentral

Bump for the review promises

If it was shit don't be afraid to throw it out there.

Theseus

Hey - Still reading, in between other things. Read a bit more last night - really starting to dislike the protagonist, but only as is intended. So far still really enjoying it. Also very impressed with the actual writing. Good review probably coming up depending on how it all ends.