another fine example of Aus journalism
Apr 1st 2009, 7:08 pm
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another fine example of Aus journalism
http://www.news.com.au/story/0,23599...7-1702,00.html
"POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie."
"It is believed Mr Hawi is not home. "
"POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie."
"It is believed Mr Hawi is not home. "
Apr 1st 2009, 8:54 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
I never was much good at English at school... (rarely got 50% marks)
MS Word grammar checks come in very useful for me, but don't find anything wrong with this.
How should it be written...
MS Word grammar checks come in very useful for me, but don't find anything wrong with this.
How should it be written...
Police have just entered the Bexley premises in Sydney's south where they are executing a search warrant.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
Apr 1st 2009, 11:23 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home."
What did the search warrant do to deserve to be executed?
Apr 2nd 2009, 3:06 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
http://www.news.com.au/story/0,23599...7-1702,00.html
"POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie."
"It is believed Mr Hawi is not home. "
"POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie."
"It is believed Mr Hawi is not home. "
Apr 2nd 2009, 3:11 pm
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"Mr Hawi was again expected to present himself to police today for questioning but he has not done so."
lol Just pick a tense and stick with it!
lol Just pick a tense and stick with it!
Apr 2nd 2009, 5:15 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
the way I first interpreted it was something like this:
"Police will be raiding mr Hawi's home this afternoon, as they step up the search for him. But we don't think he'll be home."
"Police will be raiding mr Hawi's home this afternoon, as they step up the search for him. But we don't think he'll be home."
Apr 2nd 2009, 9:49 pm
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I read it as if it was actually happening at the time they were writing it...
Breaking News
Breaking News
POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie.
Police have just entered the Bexley premises in Sydney's south where they are executing a search warrant.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
Police have just entered the Bexley premises in Sydney's south where they are executing a search warrant.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
Apr 2nd 2009, 9:51 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
I read it as if it was actually happening at the time they were writing it...
Breaking News
Breaking News
POLICE are raiding the home of Comanchero chief Mahmoud "Mick" Hawi this afternoon as they step up the search for the wanted bikie.
Police have just entered the Bexley premises in Sydney's south where they are executing a search warrant.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
Police have just entered the Bexley premises in Sydney's south where they are executing a search warrant.
It is believed Mr Hawi is not home.
Apr 2nd 2009, 10:04 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
Too far past my english level, I should ask my wife, but she is not home ....., or should that be; not at home ? 
My thinking now is; could it be a difference between Northern English and Southern English as well. I remember having the mickey taken out of me something cronic when I moved South, because of my way of speaking.
I always think that was the reason behind my bad English results, but then again, it could just be me...
My thinking now is; could it be a difference between Northern English and Southern English as well. I remember having the mickey taken out of me something cronic when I moved South, because of my way of speaking.
I always think that was the reason behind my bad English results, but then again, it could just be me...
Apr 2nd 2009, 10:09 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
This often happens. Revisit a "breaking story" over several hours and you'll usually find that it is updated regularly (ie. three lines of basic information becomes three pagraphs of detailed information). It's not uncommon to see grammatical errors in the early editions, but these are usually weeded out over time.
Apr 4th 2009, 11:46 pm
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
This often happens. Revisit a "breaking story" over several hours and you'll usually find that it is updated regularly (ie. three lines of basic information becomes three pagraphs of detailed information). It's not uncommon to see grammatical errors in the early editions, but these are usually weeded out over time.
I don't think that it's a journalism issue - but it certainly is a proof-reading issue.
I'll try and post a few this week.
Apr 5th 2009, 1:04 am
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Re: another fine example of Aus journalism
Ooh, don't talk to me about Sky News! They're bad enough here, let alone Down Under! :curse:
