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Old Nov 29th 2012, 11:10 am
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Further to some replies in another thread about not getting any feedback after applying for jobs I thought I might as well upload a copy of my CV and see what you guys think.
From what little feedback I do get, usually after making a follow up phone call, they seem to think it's great but I get the impression that they're just trying to palm me off.
Anyway, critique my CV and I'll critique yours.
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I was out here in 1998 and was living in Melbourne. My mate(Aussie) and I were both looking for work. We both went for jobs and kept getting nothing. Never mind the licence things. But one place we went to mentioned that i had had many jobs on my CV. And that it looked like i had no stable job. But as many of us know. Working 1 month here , 6 months there etc etc Is quite common if you work through agencies as i did in London.

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Old Nov 29th 2012, 12:18 pm
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I was out here in 1998 and was living in Melbourne. My mate(Aussie) and I were both looking for work. We both went for jobs and kept getting nothing. Never mind the licence things. But one place we went to mentioned that i had had many jobs on my CV. And that it looked like i had no stable job. But as many of us know. Working 1 month here , 6 months there etc etc Is quite common if you work through agencies as i did in London.
Yeah. I got that as well. In my my first interview here, which I got the job by the way, they alluded to the fact that I had jumped around a bit and I had to explain that I was a contract worker,
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I don't know if the number of companies is the problem. I have only 3 on mines and i am 35 and i have the same problem as you. Two are companies I owned so maybe my experience scares them off lol!
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had my done by a company here, cut it from 5 to 2 pages, was told if
you ain't got em in 2 pages forget it.
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had my done by a company here, cut it from 5 to 2 pages, was told if
you ain't got em in 2 pages forget it.
I've tried to keep it concise and the only way I could possibly shorten it is to delete most of my employment history, which is probably where the weakness in my CV lies.
A prospective employer could view it in two ways, one, that I have unstable work history or two, I have been exposed to different environments and that I am more adaptable and have a broader skill set than someone who has worked for the same company for nearly 25 years.
I guess most employers believe the former.
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I've tried to keep it concise and the only way I could possibly shorten it is to delete most of my employment history, which is probably where the weakness in my CV lies.
A prospective employer could view it in two ways, one, that I have unstable work history or two, I have been exposed to different environments and that I am more adaptable and have a broader skill set than someone who has worked for the same company for nearly 25 years.
I guess most employers believe the former.
I had a quick look and thought it looked like a lot of jobs - if they were contract through an agency could you list the agency as employer and then the contracts in the description to allow you to give a bit of info on the type of work you have done?

I attached a copy of my cv - any thoughts?
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Hi Wendy,
Yeah, I like your CV. Mine used to formatted in a similar way to yours but of course the problem I had was that my CV was about 8 pages long!!
Thanks for all the constructive feedback, so far, on this thread.
I think I will need to condense my employment history somewhat and I think Wendy's idea was a good one.
The period of employment form 2003- 2012 on my CV, I'll state that
I was self employed, which essentially I was on the CIS scheme and state that I worked for various contractors and agencies on a contract by contract basis.
I think it would at least give a good first impression. I think you guys were right, it doesn't look good to have long list of employers even though we know that this day in age it's fairly common for tradies to work contract by contract.
Thanks again
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Hi Derren,

Got a few pointers mate:

I think, as other people have pointed out, it is a bit long.

Remove the title 'Resume', it's obvious what it is

The 'Skills and Experience' section, just try and make it briefer. Things like:

 Selecting appropriate materials for the relevant task
 Select and utilise various types of tools, power tools, plant and equipment

are pretty obvious and can be left out.

For References, just say 'Available on request'

The notes at the end. You could put your travels around Australia in your employment history. Also, things like 'I'm hard working, punctual etc', again, I think it's a pretty obvious thing to say and can be left out. No one's going to put, 'lazy, unmotivated, massive drink problem, rarely show up (due to the drink problem mentioned) etc'. People like that always write 'Hard working, punctual...' in their cv or resume. I'm sure you are hard working and punctual, though

Good luck with your job search
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Originally Posted by Lou_Diamond_Phillips
Hi Derren,

Got a few pointers mate:

I think, as other people have pointed out, it is a bit long.

Remove the title 'Resume', it's obvious what it is

The 'Skills and Experience' section, just try and make it briefer. Things like:

 Selecting appropriate materials for the relevant task
 Select and utilise various types of tools, power tools, plant and equipment

are pretty obvious and can be left out.

For References, just say 'Available on request'

The notes at the end. You could put your travels around Australia in your employment history. Also, things like 'I'm hard working, punctual etc', again, I think it's a pretty obvious thing to say and can be left out. No one's going to put, 'lazy, unmotivated, massive drink problem, rarely show up (due to the drink problem mentioned) etc'. People like that always write 'Hard working, punctual...' in their cv or resume. I'm sure you are hard working and punctual, though

Good luck with your job search
Cheers mate,
Thanks for the feedback. I've used some of your suggestions. I have left the 2 Australian references on there as they have been contacted.
Also, I have kept the Australian travels in the notes section as I really want the employment history to be as short as possible.
I have managed to condense my CV to about 2 1/2 pages.
Again thanks for the feedback
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OK, after all the helpful feedback I've managed to shorten my CV from nearly 4 pages to 2 1/2. I don't think it could be condensed any further, my employment history is what it is and the only other way to shorten it would be to cull my UK qualifications which I'm inclined to keep on there.
I have to say that with all the non responses to job applications, my CV in its former format did generate some interest and did help get the work I'm currently in.
Anyway, I've attached a copy of my new, improved CV and would be interested on your thoughts.
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Originally Posted by derren7
OK, after all the helpful feedback I've managed to shorten my CV from nearly 4 pages to 2 1/2. I don't think it could be condensed any further, my employment history is what it is and the only other way to shorten it would be to cull my UK qualifications which I'm inclined to keep on there.
I have to say that with all the non responses to job applications, my CV in its former format did generate some interest and did help get the work I'm currently in.
Anyway, I've attached a copy of my new, improved CV and would be interested on your thoughts.
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Hi Derren - It looks better because it doesn't look like you are always changing jobs - but I would probably move the experience to the end and just bullet point key skills at the beginning to make it more catching. Do you mind if I show it to a collegue who's used to screening CV's before interviews?
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I agree with old sparkles
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Hi Derren - It looks better because it doesn't look like you are always changing jobs - but I would probably move the experience to the end and just bullet point key skills at the beginning to make it more catching. Do you mind if I show it to a collegue who's used to screening CV's before interviews?
Hi Wendy,
Thanks. Yeah, don't mind if you do. That would be great.
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